Pretty good job. I like how you`ve improved since the first track (not uploaded)
I can see a future and potential in you, if you keep doing it.
About the track. Objectively speaking, it sounds a bit dull... idk. Drums should be louder. I do like the mixing in this one. really good job.
Subjective opinion has already been spoken (above)
But as a amateur musician and newbie critic, i would give it 3.5 - 4 stars for trying and improvement.
[FGS]